Basketball

I love basketball so much. I never bore with everything about this sport. Basketball has become a part of my live. Although I’m not a really good player, I feel that basketball is my soul. I’ve been playing basketball since I was in junior high school, but I never feel enough with it. I want to know more and more about it. It is the most interesting sport for me because it teaches me how to socialize in a new community and how to be myself. The most important thing why I like basketball is because most of its move has a meaning for me. It makes me confident when I can make a score and it make me feel strong when I block a shoot. I’m absolutely addicted with this sport.

Filman Ferdian
16507209

Filman, there are some irrelevant sentences in your paragraph.

Boring Ironing

I hate doing house chores, especially ironing. I have two strong reasons for it. First, it’s a waste of time. I could spend hours (that seems years) to finish ironing my whole family’s clothes. The second reason is that it is boring. I sit in front of the ironing board and repeatedly propel the iron forward and backward to flatten a t-shirt and do the same to the jeans, pajamas and the rest of the messy clothes.

Sabrina Rahmawati

16507217

Sabrina, your topic sentence is not developed well.

I like music and guitar

Things which I like to do in my spare time is listening to the music and playing the song note by note well with a guitar.I have known music since I was in elementary school,then started listening to it and playing guitar when I was in senior high school.According to my opinion,music can change people's mood and playing music instrument can develop our right brain's skill,because when we listen to a song and try to play it,we have to know what notes are played.As we imagine and think about the note played,our right brain is working.Besides, I can also find another people whom I can make a music jam and share my experience and knowledge in music with and it will improve my skill in music and make me have more relations.



Garry Gufiano Pane
16507171

Please read the chapter about 'topic sentence' in your Academic Writing book. Your topic sentence is not developed well.

Chicken Porridge

Chicken Porridge is a simple food that usually served at breakfast. With some chicken, onion, cakue, egg, and cracker on it, makes it tasty. Almost everyone like it. Light meal for the morning. For me, chicken porridge is not only for breakfast, everytime that possible for me to eat it, i will. A lot of things that makes me sad when i moved to bandung, but i enjoy it now, because in bandung there's a lot of chicken porridge seller. In my spare time, i do some research to know where good and tasty chicken porridge is sold. I've been to mang oyo's chicken porridge, uniquely the porridge doesn't fell off even though the bowl is upside down.

Does anyone know where other tasty chicken porridge is sold? :-)

Sumayyah Tsabitah
16607218

Sumayyah, your topic sentence is too specific, and your paragraph is not focus at all. (see chapter 3 from the Academic writing book 'about relevant and irrelevant sentences'.

TRAVELING

TRAVELING

I like traveling so much. I don’t travel frequently, but I have gone to many places in my life. Usually I go with my family. And we usually go when there is a long holiday. Sometimes we go on a long vacation and sometimes just a short one. But I always enjoy traveling whether it is a long or short vacation.
I like traveling because everytime I travel, I always find something new and it’s just so interesting to know new things. When we travel, we also find new cultures or habits that are very different from our own. Maybe we will feel weird and unfamiliar with that situation, but there are always fun things to discover from other cultures. We can learn it for our social life. When we travel, we meet so many people. Each person comes from a different background and ethnicity. Everybody has a different perspective. By traveling, we can make more friends and connections. And you never know if maybe someday, you will need their help.
Never say no to traveling. You never know what you will face; new experiences, new friends, and the refreshing of your mind.

ANDARA LIVIA 16507118

Andra, your grammar is good. Your topic sentence is not specific enough. In your paragraph you are using 'I', 'we' and 'you'. The use of these pronouns makes your paragraph not coherence. If you are going to use 'I', please write about you and your travel, you are using 'you' as if you are giving advice that should be written in a separate paragraph.

I LIKE PLAYING RPG GAMES

RPG stands for Role Playing Games. This is my favorite genre among all games. I often find myself sitting in front of my TV for hours when playing it, ignoring everything around me at the time. The interesting part of this game is the total control of the character given, making us practically be the character himself. This is the part I can never resist. Sometimes, I could get frustrated when the I couldn't advance in the game because of an obstacle. When it happened, I usually spent a lot more time playing. And when I'm through with the obstacle, it feels even greater than having an 1 million in cash jackpot ^_^. The satisfaction it gives is filling, and I like it. I have played many titles before, but playing can never be boring for me. A new release can only mean a new world to explore, a reason enough for me to keep playing.

Daniel Sucipto Marbun 16507183
Good work.

Playing Computer Games

I like playing computer games. I know that there are many kinds of computer games and some of them are installed in my computer, but I prefer to play racing or sports games. In racing category, I like playing "Need for Speed". It has many challenging races and also many cars which can be modified into many variations. I like modifying the cars. In sports category, I like playing “Pro Evolution Soccer”. This is a football computer game. It has many famous teams from many countries and football clubs which can be played. In this game, we can arrange the strategy and play the match by controlling each of the players. These two games are often played. I always play them when I have spare time or I need entertainment. Computer games are very exciting. I enjoy playing them very much.


Bernardino Madaharsa Dito Adiwidya
16507204

Something I Like...

Since I was introduced to internet, I’ve been more and more enthusiastic to find the world outside my daily world. It became one of my hobbies. I like using internet to find other friends, download many things, discuss many things in many forums even my homework ^_^, do chatting, and of course, search many things I want to know with my lovely search engine, Google. I find that this search engine is very good, because it’s hard for me to remember every site I visit and I want to visit. The first time I used it, I was very confused because it listed thousands even millions, but I the more I use it, the more I know that it has many features which can make our searching more efficient. I’ve found many important things by this search engine, like software, music, videos, e-books, and so on, but sometimes I felt guilty because I know that I did piracy by ignoring the copyright. Besides, there’re also bad things, sometimes the result directs me to the sites which provide porn stuff. The presence of search engines has made the very wide world, internet, easier to explore.

Thanks for posting.

Martin T.H. Sirait (16507338)

Hometown

I like to go to my hometown, Kuala Tungkal, with my family on a vacation. One of the reasons why I like to go there is because I can meet my aunties, uncles, and cousins. I can talk and share stories with them. Another reason is the clean, healthy, and beautiful environment in there. I can watch and enjoy the scenery of green trees. The quiet environment gives me a peaceful feeling and makes my body relaxed. The other reason is I can find my favourite food there. In other places I also can find it, but, none of them can beat one in my hometown. That’s all the reasons why I like to go to my hometown.

Aris Feryanto
16507262

Playing Trading-Card Games

I love playing "Vandaria Wars", one of many Trading-Card Games, for four reasons. First, I love its gameplay. Its gameplay is different from the other TCG that attract me to play. Secondly, I love playing "Vandaria Wars" because in "Vandaria Wars" we are not only need luck to win but also logic and strategy, its developed my logic as well as make myself more critical. The next reason is that I can meet new and different people with different background and point of view that will increase my soft skills and make me have a lot of friends, I can also socialize with other people in the community. Last but not least, its illustration, its illustration are so good that won't make me feel boring to see and play the cards. Well, those are the reasons why I love playing TCG.

Esqi Aktiadi
16507162

Thanks for posting. Your topic sentence is not developed well. We will discuss this in class.